Since this is a story you wrote a while back most of what I have to say has already been said, so I'm just going to give a couple comparison's that I hope indicate the kind of feeling I got from your story.
Color: When I saw the movie Dick Tracy I was struck by vibrance of color, the hard-edge it gave to everything. Your story has this same shiny brilliance.
Shape: Sin City, the comic book. Frank Miller populated this comic with dark silhouettes and bold lines, and white space shocking against black backgrounds. It made his pictures loom with power.
Your story combined both these aspects, the brilliance of color with the stark contrast of black & white. If that doesn't take talent, I don't know what does.