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LJ Idol, Week 3, A Moment of Bliss

I could drink a case of you, darlin'…

Fingers, lips, skin on skin; all walls destroyed, every barrier broken. The only sounds are those of us breathing and icy December rain beating on the window pane. I thought I would push you away; I thought I would look for any opportunity to escape what I've feared most; intimacy. My fear has never been the act of sex, but the surrender of self that comes with it. Yet I surrender now, inhibitions released, breathing you in like a warm summer breeze.
You run your hand over the white jagged lines on my inner thighs'; the scars on my skin which tell stories of past pain. They are imprints of wounds which have healed, but remain in many ways; wounds caused by myself and those who came and left before you. You don't shy away from them. Your hands are different from those I've felt before; hands reaching to take what I didn't want to give. Yours gently push away my trepidation, making room for gifts I have never received; patience, acceptance, love. I let you in, needing to be as close to you as possible, never wanting it to stop. You whisper that you love me, and for the first time I believe you. There is no pain, only a bliss that I have never known, and will never know again.

I could drink a case of you, darlin',
And I would still be on my feet,
O I would still be on my feet.
-Joni Mitchell


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Oct. 8th, 2008 01:38 pm (UTC)
Hot! and tender... very nicely done...
Oct. 8th, 2008 08:06 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Glad you likedit.
Oct. 8th, 2008 01:51 pm (UTC)
In a word: beautiful.

Absolutely. And I don't doubt that it's because I can relate to so much of it. Excellent job. :-)
Oct. 8th, 2008 08:07 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much.
Oct. 8th, 2008 01:59 pm (UTC)
This was really sweet and bittersweet and touching. Good job.
Oct. 8th, 2008 08:10 pm (UTC)
Glad you liked it.
Oct. 8th, 2008 03:00 pm (UTC)
Oct. 8th, 2008 04:10 pm (UTC)
This is my favorite Joni song.
Oct. 8th, 2008 05:12 pm (UTC)
Oh, wonderful!

I can relate quite a bit.
Oct. 8th, 2008 08:05 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much.
Oct. 8th, 2008 08:17 pm (UTC)
Again, I almost didn't post it, haha.
Oct. 8th, 2008 11:46 pm (UTC)
Yay, the porn! :P

Really beautiful. Heart-achingly beautiful. You are quite the little writer, :)
Oct. 9th, 2008 12:07 pm (UTC)
Yayayay. You like me, you really like me.
Oct. 12th, 2008 04:09 am (UTC)
LOL @ Carlie's porn comment! I will vote for you. :)
Oct. 12th, 2008 11:47 am (UTC)
She's the one who told me to write about sex in the first place. lol.
Oct. 8th, 2008 11:56 pm (UTC)
I really liked this entry.

BTW, have you heard KD Lang's cover of Case of You? It's my favorite version, even slightly above Joni's original.
Oct. 9th, 2008 01:12 am (UTC)
Wow! Beautiful writing, I can't believe the impression you've left in so few words. This is magnificent.
Oct. 9th, 2008 05:13 am (UTC)
This has such a beautiful ache to it.
Oct. 9th, 2008 12:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you.
Oct. 9th, 2008 07:59 pm (UTC)
I like especially the rhythm in this piece. : )
Oct. 10th, 2008 01:30 am (UTC)
nice. Tastefully done.
Oct. 11th, 2008 02:08 pm (UTC)
Whew! *fans self* Very nice!
Oct. 11th, 2008 03:21 pm (UTC)
Oct. 11th, 2008 05:08 pm (UTC)
I enjoyed this. :-)
Oct. 11th, 2008 05:51 pm (UTC)
Thanks a lot!
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