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Am I losing my touch?

IEdit: I fixed the link. It works now.

f you read and enjoyed my entry, then please go and vote!
If you honestly didn't enjoy it, tell me why here so I can improve for the next round. This 6.7 percent of the vote thing isn't working for me. I mean, I know I'm new and all, but I did reasonably well last week, so the giant drop in comments and votes is weird.

The deadline to vote is tomorrow at 1 EST.

Huggs,
B

Comments

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morning_stand
Oct. 5th, 2008 07:46 pm (UTC)
The link you your entry took me to the url for posting an entry. lol
mendedbutterfly
Oct. 5th, 2008 08:50 pm (UTC)
I voted.
____hejira
Oct. 5th, 2008 09:01 pm (UTC)
Thanks!!!
mendedbutterfly
Oct. 5th, 2008 10:26 pm (UTC)
Not a problem :)
lavendergem
Oct. 5th, 2008 09:28 pm (UTC)
I feel the same way! I don't get it. Last week , we both did well,and got lots of votes. This week, nothin'. What's up with that?
lustbandit
Oct. 5th, 2008 11:10 pm (UTC)
I will be completely honest with you. I didn't enjoy your entry, because it was missing what your first entry had in it: emotion. This one seemed lifeless and dull and to be honest, I didn't really get it. You didn't develop the characters you were trying to create very well. I got that the husband and wife seem to have a bad relationship, but you didn't get into either of the character's heads or hearts very well... and that's what you should be doing.

Plus, I just didn't find it very interesting. I wasn't caught up into what was going on or the description of where to sit in the church. I didn't care, nor did I really think that it works the way it was described. I also felt as though you wrote about this for the lack of being able to think of anything else, when I know of some good instances from your life that you could be drawing on... (ie. what it's like to be blind in America, Jeff, bisexuality as a Christian woman)

You have good life experiences and can create veiled characters that are in those situations, you just need to draw from them. Then, you're writing what you know. I just didn't see what you wrote this time as something that you know.
lustbandit
Oct. 5th, 2008 11:11 pm (UTC)
But I voted for you anyway, so that counts. :)
____hejira
Oct. 5th, 2008 11:24 pm (UTC)
The topic was "What I don'at care about, but should."
So instead of bitching about the world's problems that I don't care about like everyone else did, I was trying to propose what too many people don't care about, but should.
I see your point though.
lustbandit
Oct. 5th, 2008 11:39 pm (UTC)
Yeahhh, I didn't know what the topic was, but I wouldn't have guessed it from reading your entry.

But I would say your best bet is to stick to writing about what you know.
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