Chordly ([info]_hannelore) wrote,
@ 2004-03-14 14:54:00
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Drabble: Best Wishes
This was inspired by the fairy tale (Sleeping Beauty? I think so.) where the assembled gift the new child with charms of beauty and wealth, all except one.

James and Lily hold a traditional gathering to welcome their baby boy into the wizarding world. Severus gives a gift of his own.



The small house was wall to wall best wishes. For a time, the war was not welcome within the house of Lily and James. The constant chatter kept waking Harry up in the bassinet. Lily didn’t mind, she preferred to keep the babe in her arms, his look of constant surprise delighted her. As she kissed his brow again, James put his arm around her and kissed hers.

“You should put him back in,” James said with a nod toward the empty bassinet. “I just saw the Prewetts.”

“He keeps waking up!” Lily said. “I don’t care about the stupid tradition, he’s not some prize pig to be gawked at, he’s a baby.”

James looked down at young Harry, the baby’s green eyes gazing at his face. He wasn’t fond of the tradition either, but he didn’t want to hurt anyone’s feelings.

“It’s for Harry,” James whispered against her ear. He kissed her cheek. “You wouldn’t want him to miss out on any good wishes, would you?”

Lily stroked the side of Harry’s face, his eyes were already drowsing asleep, held next to the warm heart of his mother. She quirked her lips in a displeased twist, but James knew by that familiar gesture that she agreed. He glanced over his shoulder to see if anyone was at the bassinet.

“What is he doing here?”

Lily looked in the direction of his disgust to see Severus Snape standing beside the bassinet. She rocked her arms back and forth as Harry started to fuss.

“Don’t you start,” Lily said. “I invited him. He’s a capable wizard and..."

“He’s a capable bastard!” James said. “He’ll probably hex Harry or curse him with boils for the rest of his life."



Severus had been pretending to look out the window when he heard Lily’s pleasant voice call him. She nattered on about some bloody garbage about how glad she was to see him, which he knew was complete and utter nonsense. He knew no one here was glad to see him. Least of all James Potter. Lily placed the sleeping baby in the bassinet and kissed him again before she was distracted by Alice Longbottom.

Severus looked down at Harry Potter, nestled in a bed of white blankets. The living room was noisy with laughter and talk. Severus glowered at the slumbering boy.

“I wish you all the world’s hatred and discomfort,” Severus said. His voice was barely a whisper. “I wish that one day you will know what it is like to be despised and disliked, shunned by those who would call you friends. I hope you will suffer for being alive, lose what is most dear to you and experience nothing but loneliness in the crowd.”

Severus realized his hands were shaking and he clasped them behind his back as he leaned toward the bassinet and whispered.

“I wish for you to know all my discomfort and more. Every last, painful, bitter moment.”

Severus smile was a grimace, but a pleased one at that. At the very least, it felt better to say it.

“Good luck,” Severus said, a touch louder but not without his customary smirk, “Harry Potter.”

Many years later, Albus was mistaken. He told Harry that Severus helped him in order to pay the debt of James saving Severus’ life.

That wasn’t the reason at all.



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[info]contrariwise
2004-03-14 08:30 pm UTC (link)
Ooh, eeeevil.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 02:27 am UTC (link)
I'm not sure if Snape is evil as much as just lashing out. Er, though maybe that's evil too.

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[info]gmth
2004-03-14 08:32 pm UTC (link)
Whoa. The last two lines really make this piece. I can so see Snape saying those things to Harry, and then trying to make up for it. This is very cool. :-)

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 02:29 am UTC (link)
Thank you! I confess this where I thought of the ending first.

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[info]corsiva
2004-03-14 08:37 pm UTC (link)
Oh god...

That was wonderful and so horribly evil. I can see him saying just that and then feeling awful for having done so. :(

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 02:33 am UTC (link)
Thanks... I'm still stuck whether he feels awful or whether he feels some obligation to make amends.

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[info]isiscolo
2004-03-14 08:48 pm UTC (link)
Waah. How sad and bitter.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 02:34 am UTC (link)
Bitter, that's a good word for it. *nods*

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[info]pauraque
2004-03-14 09:18 pm UTC (link)
What everyone else said. And clever!

I wish for you to know all my discomfort and more.

Ooh, Pensieve. Poor Sev, he shot himself in the foot with that one. *g*

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[info]corsiva
2004-03-14 11:48 pm UTC (link)
OOH! I didn't even notice that! *1000 points to you*

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 02:40 am UTC (link)
I wish I could claim I was clever enough to think that one through, but it didn't even occur to me while I was writing it. To see it a second time, though, I'm glad it works because I like that second meaning even more. Thanks for discovering it!

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[info]moshi
2004-03-14 10:08 pm UTC (link)
Wow, how terrible, and sad. And an excellent ending, that really hit me. Brilliant. :0)

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 03:02 am UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]merrycontrary
2004-03-15 02:40 am UTC (link)
Oh well done. I can see Snape both spitefully cursing a child and then being riddled with guilt.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 03:12 am UTC (link)
Thanks, again I can't be certain if I want Snape to feel guilty or just bitter and snide. *grins*

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[info]merrycontrary
2004-03-15 03:24 am UTC (link)
All three. It works with his character. It's why so many love him.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 04:30 am UTC (link)
ooh, your icon!

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[info]merrycontrary
2004-03-15 05:05 am UTC (link)
It is for sharing if you want to use it. Credit to [info]maidenjedi

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[info]ridicully
2004-03-15 07:34 am UTC (link)
What a great idea for a wizarding tradition.
It seems so like Snape, to do something like that.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-15 11:53 am UTC (link)
Thanks, I had hoped it did!

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[info]neotoma
2004-03-15 04:37 pm UTC (link)
Very nice reworking of the Sleeping Beauty theme, though Severus really did bring a lot of the grief he's had dealing with Harry on himself.

Interestingly, most of the interpretations I've read of that particular tale have the evil fairy giving her bad wish because the parents snubbed her by NOT inviting her to the christening. You've changed it by having Snape give the ill-wishing because of James' lack of charity and compassion. It's still a cautionary tale, but different emphasis.

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[info]_hannelore
2004-03-16 08:22 pm UTC (link)
I'm amused how that worked out in its own way and it does seem to read more like a cautionary tale, just like the fairy tales were. Thank you!

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[info]sevter
2005-02-13 09:19 am UTC (link)
Ooooooh niceeeeee! I like your Snape. I really really like him. I just read some poor abused Snape stories (and cursing Black, Dumbledore and the rest of the world for letting icle Sevvikins be so abused...and the Slytherins of course) and I really need a story where the tables are turned.

Thanks!

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[info]_hannelore
2006-08-03 04:56 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reading. :)

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[info]stormygirl84
2006-05-13 03:49 am UTC (link)
Dear God. Poor Severus. Imagine not only how terrible he must feel about himself and his life in the first place to be pushed into saying these things - to a little baby, no less - but also what he must feel years later, when he realises all of his hateful wishes have come true on that innocent child.

Beautifully written. It was wonderfully like a fairy tale or fable, and nicely mixed in with the Potter theme. Your characters were also bang on, absolutely in-character. Beautiful.

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[info]_hannelore
2006-08-03 04:56 pm UTC (link)
Thanks very much! :D

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[info]mecklen
2006-08-03 01:23 am UTC (link)
Stunning. Literally, stunning. The way the last line hits you, and the sincerity of Snape's speech though we know he regrets it later. Absolutely heart-breakingly lovely.

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[info]_hannelore
2006-08-03 04:57 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad you enjoyed, many thanks for the read. :)

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[info]aubrem
2006-08-18 06:01 am UTC (link)
Wow. I hadn't seen this until Rexluscus pointed it out. Very nice. I admit I must be on an "bad snape" kick because at first I read the last couple lines as "Snape helps Harry in order to keep him alive so he will suffer longer." Ahem. Conflicted, guilty Snape is much better though. : )

Anyway, very nice - I particularly like the lines you give Snape.

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[info]_hannelore
2006-08-31 01:52 am UTC (link)
Eeeeee, I'm glad I checked out this link again... damn LJ lack-of-emailed-comments.

I keep kicking this storyline around in my head and it does end up being very much more "bad Snape" than guilty Snape. ;)

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(Anonymous)
2006-11-03 04:42 am UTC (link)
i don't think he was sorry, i think he saved potter so potter could feel the wish happen to him more than it already has. more pian for harry

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(Anonymous)
2007-07-01 01:16 pm UTC (link)
Holy Moses. This is powerful.
Patrick

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